tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post113816687365723773..comments2024-02-20T17:40:21.618-05:00Comments on jeremy freese's weblog: (ssf) process of eliminationjeremyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12755662766163119607noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138315564694346232006-01-26T17:46:00.000-05:002006-01-26T17:46:00.000-05:00I suspect that Colonel Mustard did it in the conse...I suspect that Colonel Mustard did it in the conservatory with Professor Plum.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138306871998932312006-01-26T15:21:00.000-05:002006-01-26T15:21:00.000-05:00Kim: No, I take them as very different, mainly bec...Kim: No, I take them as very different, mainly because I think "workshopped" is a word that I don't think has a full substitute. I don't have any general opposition to making nouns into verbs in that situation.jeremyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12755662766163119607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138300982453898692006-01-26T13:43:00.000-05:002006-01-26T13:43:00.000-05:00Um, isn't "workshop" (v) on the same level of the ...Um, isn't "workshop" (v) on the same level of the ugggh-o-meter as "interface" or "impact" as verbs?B. Stronghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03140528720464512004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138288826722310882006-01-26T10:20:00.000-05:002006-01-26T10:20:00.000-05:00It was, incidentially, the lone appearance of a pr...It was, incidentially, the lone appearance of a profanity in anyone's short short fiction story for Week #1. Another guy used "pissed" (as in urinates, not as in angry) in his story, but I don't really count that.jeremyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12755662766163119607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138288679952256952006-01-26T10:17:00.000-05:002006-01-26T10:17:00.000-05:00Absolut: I did entertain various alternatives for ...Absolut: I did entertain various alternatives for "fuck," but I liked having the three k sounds all together in the sentence in appears. The most obvious alternative, "freak", occurs a couple sentences later and would introduce a long vowel anyway, so that was out.jeremyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12755662766163119607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138288372447673182006-01-26T10:12:00.000-05:002006-01-26T10:12:00.000-05:00Very enjoyable story, congrats! (I read the Colon...Very enjoyable story, congrats! (I read the Colonel after yours so I didn't get the first few sentences the same way I would've otherwise. But was still fine. I much prefer yours over that one overall.)<BR/> I don't quite get the use of the word fuck in this story. I am no prude, I use it all the time in everyday language, but was there a particular reason to put it in the writing here?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138250715065699722006-01-25T23:45:00.000-05:002006-01-25T23:45:00.000-05:00I've always thought you were destined for greatnes...I've always thought you were destined for greatness... It's not enough to have the PhD, the Harvard fellowship, and great hair. You have, and always have had, the talent to make people laugh. Wonderful stories....<BR/>-jennifer n.jenniferhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01975960246418403266noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138208890015136542006-01-25T12:08:00.000-05:002006-01-25T12:08:00.000-05:00Thanks all for the kind remarks about the story! ...Thanks all for the kind remarks about the story! Sarahliz, billards with professors is generally to be avoided. EA, you are right about its being autobiographical. RWS, my preference was also always to be Miss Scarlet especially since, if you play by the official rules, she always gets to go first. Anon 11:58 -- This same question was raised in the workshop, and I'm not sure what I could do about it. Basically, the way I was thinking about this is that the narrator and the person he's talking to are two detectives on the case.jeremyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12755662766163119607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138208312602767282006-01-25T11:58:00.000-05:002006-01-25T11:58:00.000-05:00That's an entertaining story, Jeremy. Not to get ...That's an entertaining story, Jeremy. Not to get all E.A. Poe about it, but is the narrator of the story one of the Clue! characters and I am missing the clues as to which one? I wondered whether the introduction of "I" (about halfway through, and then used in the final sentence) brought me out of the story too much, maybe a sign that the story's conceit wouldn't carry without an input. But I tried reading it without "I" and it wasn't as funny -- too cloistered. But I thought I'd share my thoughts. Thanks for putting your story online. I really like this short short fiction.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138202508292702752006-01-25T10:21:00.000-05:002006-01-25T10:21:00.000-05:00It's true... all writing is really biographical, i...It's true... all writing is really biographical, isn't it, Prof Plum?<BR/><BR/>-E.A.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138201838423441002006-01-25T10:10:00.000-05:002006-01-25T10:10:00.000-05:00Good story!JoshGood story!<BR/><BR/>JoshAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138201243855936302006-01-25T10:00:00.000-05:002006-01-25T10:00:00.000-05:00i dug your story.i dug your story.Henryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09533523695529536156noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138200707180710592006-01-25T09:51:00.000-05:002006-01-25T09:51:00.000-05:00Really, really glad you're enjoying the class and ...Really, really glad you're enjoying the class and your teacher.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138190083835966672006-01-25T06:54:00.000-05:002006-01-25T06:54:00.000-05:00i enjoyed your story so much more than "the colon...i enjoyed your story so much more than "the colonel." wow. short fiction. not sure i understand it if that piece is supposed to be the model. but, i'm the kind of girl who likes things to be handed to her. lift a finger? no way.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138172607072418422006-01-25T02:03:00.000-05:002006-01-25T02:03:00.000-05:00Wow. That's incredibly funny. The first two line...Wow. That's incredibly funny. The first two lines alone are hilarious (though maybe they'd be less so if they didn't immediately follow the Forche piece). <BR/><BR/>And I just don't want to think about playing billiards with Professor Plum. Really I don't.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5558726.post-1138168665313254102006-01-25T00:57:00.000-05:002006-01-25T00:57:00.000-05:00Clever angle. Thanks for sharing! It flows quite...Clever angle. Thanks for sharing! It flows quite well.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com